[REQUEST] Could someone help me make this paragraph flow a little better?

gyropyro · 6 months

Company’s Eductor Trucks and drivers are available and thoroughly trained for:

• Catch basin cleaning • Storm drains • Hydro-line jetting • Root cutting • Bio-swale • Retention ponds

Our fleet provides fresh water for storage tank cleaning, hydro-excavation, locating (not sure what you are locating), retention vault cleaning, sewer lines, and all industrial applications.

We specialize in unique jetting applications.

I would make that last sentence on its own line and possibly italic.

Talpostal · 6 months

IMO...

Company’s Eductor drivers are thoroughly trained for catch basin cleaning, storm drain cleaning, hydro-line jetting, root cutting, bio-swale, and retention pond cleaning.

Our trucks also provide fresh water for storage tank cleaning, hydro-excavation, locating, retention vault cleaning, sewer lines, and all industrial applications. We specialize in unique jetting applications.

MrDubious · 6 months

The long list of items in each sentence is the hardest part, and there's not really a way to fix that without breaking them into multiple sentences. The first sentence can be easily reworked, though:

Company’s Eductor Trucks are available with thoroughly trained drivers for catch basin cleaning, storm drain cleaning, hydro-line jetting, root cutting, bio-swale, and retention pond cleaning. Our fleet provides fresh water for storage tank cleaning, hydro-excavation, locating, retention vault cleaning, sewer lines, and all industrial applications. We specialize in unique jetting applications.

icebandit · 6 months

Best I can do on short notice Imgur

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